Sunday, April 24, 2016

Peer Review

In this post, I will be reviewing my peers' work.

Peer Review 13a

Peer Review 13b

Reflection on Project 3

In this post, I will be answering the following questions:




  1. What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
  2. What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
  3. How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
  4. How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

1. One success I experienced was developing my argument. My drafts were well written so I knew exactly what I wanted to say.

2. One challenge I experienced was finding visual content for my video essay.

3. Now that this project is over, a huge weight is off of my shoulders. I am ready for my final project.

4. I think that I developed a good argument and that my project was a success.

Revised Post to Peer Reviewers

In this post, I will be answering these questions about my fine cut:

  • Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know
  • Major issues or weaknesses in the “Fine Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses)
  • Major virtues or strengths in the “Fine Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)

1. What I would like you to keep in mind as you review my draft is that this is the first time I have ever created any media like this. I hope that it has the correct conventions and that my argument is clearly defined.

2. I would say that an issue I had was the lack of outside audio in my piece, and I did this simply because I did not know how to get audio for it from the internet. I should have spent more time researching how to do this.

3. I think the strength lies in my argument, and that anyone who watches my video essay will be convinced that I am right.

Editorial Report 13b

In this post, I will be comparing content from my rough draft to my final draft.

Rough Draft Conclusion:

When considering this plan, I see its merit. I see how anyone could look at it and think: “why not, it’s helping the people that need help the most”. However, on closer inspection, it may be a bit more dangerous than we may think. It could seriously destabilize the American economy by forcing companies to increase outsourcing, have fewer jobs for people, and turn to automated solutions. This could actually end up working against the people it is trying to help, because 8 dollars an hour may turn to zero, and the workers watching as computers or people from other countries do their jobs. This may also run companies out of business if they cant keep up with the increases. People looking to start new businesses will have an even tougher time doing so, and will look to other more business-accommodating economies for their business. Is a minimum wage increase a bad idea? Not necessarily. Is a minimum wage increase to 15$ a bad idea? Absolutely. I believe that something should be done about the poverty crisis in America, I just think that the solution should be more measured and decisive.”

Final Draft Conclusion:



The changes made here are obvious, I made the content into a video essay form. This is more effective because it is my voice and my inflection that drives home key points in the conclusion.

Editorial Report 13a

In this post, I will be comparing content from my rough draft to content from my final draft.

Rough Cut Intro:

"Hello everyone, my name is Malik and I will be talking about the minimum wage controversy. This controversy has been in mainstream media as of late, highlighted by the presidential race that is happening here in America. The basis of the controversy is the democratic nominees are promising and urging raising the minimum wage both federally and in the states. This call has lead to several states announcing to raise the minimum wage through a myriad of ways. The response to these announcements is the elation of the lower to middle class people, and the wariness of economists."


While I talk, have pictures of what I am talking about appear on screen, news headlines, etc... Make sure there is a picture of both democratic nominees and many of the protests that have been happening and the celebrations that have been happening. Also, when referring to states announcing to raise the minimum wage, show pictures of those states (California, Seattle, New York, etc...)

Final Cut Intro:


The changes made here are obvious, I made the content into a video essay form. This is more effective because it is my voice and my inflection that drives home key points in the introduction.

Sunday, April 17, 2016

Peer Review 12

In this post, I will reviewing my peers work.

12A:

Comment on Jason Boley's Rough Cut

12B:

Comment on Missy Webb's Rough Cut

Open Post to Peer Reviewers

In this post I will be providing you with my rough draft and discussing it.

When considering my rough draft, I would like you to know that it is the transcript for a video essay. Everything on it will be read out loud and I may add a bit to it as i read. It will be accompanied by images and videos.

A big weakness of this is the fact that I can not present the reader the video version of this because I wont have the materials until next week.

A strength of my work is I think I have a well developed argument and I will be able to quickly transform this into video format based on the transcript I have already prepared.


Editorial Report 12b

In this post, I will be revising content from my rough cut.

Main Body 3 (Rough Cut):

“Unfortunately, there are negatives to a plan like this. America has never attempted to increase the minimum wage by such a large amount, (as the fifteen dollar wage would be doubling the federal minimum). Looking at this from an economic standpoint, the plan is unsound. The biggest issue is that businesses that hire minimum wage workers will be forced to do something. 3 million people having their wages increased by an average of 4 dollars is a steep price for these companies to pay. Another important thing to understand about that 3 million number is that it only counts people who are being paid minimum wage. If an individual is being paid nine dollars an hour, technically they are being paid more than minimum wage. However, when the minimum wage increases, they will be brought up with it. This means that the 3 million number is not entirely accurate. When considering this, we must now know that companies will be raising the wages of anyone in America making less than $15 an hour. When considering this, 42% of Americans will be getting a wage increase." 

Main Body 3 (Revised Version):

“Unfortunately, there are negatives to a plan like this. America has never attempted to increase the minimum wage by such a large amount, (as the fifteen dollar wage would be doubling the federal minimum). Looking at this from an economic standpoint, the plan is unsound. The biggest issue is that businesses that hire minimum wage workers will be forced to do something. 3 million people having their wages increased by an average of 4 dollars is a steep price for these companies to pay. Another important thing to understand about that 3 million number is that it only counts people who are being paid minimum wage. If an individual is being paid nine dollars an hour, technically they are being paid more than minimum wage. However, when the minimum wage increases, they will be brought up with it. This means that the 3 million number is not entirely accurate. When considering this, we must now know that companies will be raising the wages of anyone in America making less than $15 an hour. When considering this, 42% of Americans will be getting a wage increase. (http://fortune.com/2015/04/13/who-makes-15-per-hour/).This can massively affect American companies that higher low wage workers, and not for the better. The current American workforce as of March 2016 is 160 million. 42% of that is almost 70 million people. Assuming the average increase is two dollars, that is 140 million dollars that companies now have to pay. And this is not just companies like McDonalds and Burger King. This is also a large majority of privately owned restaurants and retailers."


Editorial Report 12a

In this post, I will be revising content from my rough cut.

Main Body 2 (Rough Cut):

“The pros of a plan like this are fairly obvious. The concept behind the plan (giving money to the people who apparently most need it) is one that is easy to back from a humanitarian standpoint. This plan also has the support of big political figures in America (Barack Obama, Hillary Clinton, and Bernie Sanders most notably). This makes the plan easier to support because many peoples role models have placed there trust in it. This plan also caters to a majority of the population. More than 3 million people in America are being paid minimum wage, which is about 4 percent of the working population. The low wage leads to many of these workers to be at the poverty line or below it. The family and friends of these people are effected by an increase of the minimum wage, so it appeals to all of those people.”

Main Body 2 (Revised Version):

“The pros of a plan like this are fairly obvious. The concept behind the plan (giving money to the people who apparently most need it) is one that is easy to back from a humanitarian standpoint. This plan also has the support of big political figures in America (Barack Obama, Hillary Clinton, and Bernie Sanders most notably). This makes the plan easier to support because many peoples role models have placed there trust in it. This plan also caters to a majority of the population. More than 3 million people in America are being paid minimum wage. The low wage leads to many of these workers to be at the poverty line or below it. The family and friends of these people are effected by an increase of the minimum wage, so it appeals to all of those people. All in all, the wage increase should positively impact the lives of the American poor, and help control the massive poverty problem we are dealing with in this country

As I speak, include pictures of the political people who support this plan, maybe including articles that are titled with something that proves they do support it. Include a graph of the people working minimum wage. Maybe create a visual that shows how many people 3 million is. Illustrate the poverty line. 

Friday, April 8, 2016

Reflection on Production

In this post, I will be answering the following questions:


  1. What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
  2. What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
  3. How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
  4. How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

1. One thing that worked this week was putting together my raw content.

2. A challenge was that I chose to share a transcript of my work, and did not convert it into a video essay.

3. I think that next week will be fairly easy, as I have already established a base for my project.

4. I am cautiously optimistic again for this project, though it will be difficult to make the video part of the video essay.

Production Report 11b

In this post I will be talking about a bit of rough content I have generated from my content outline.

Main Body 1:

State my personal view on the controversy. tell the audience I will be analyzing the pros and the cons, but tell them I am more on the "this idea is bad" side. Tell the audience why I am. Explain to them why some people are on the other side.

The content I have produced from this is a rough transcript that will be adapted into video essay format.

Main Body 1 Raw Content:

"I have my own opinion on this topic. I tend to side a bit more with the economists who are wary of this minimum wage increase. First, I think we should identify the problem. The problem, at its base, is that lower-class workers are not provided with a "living wage" and that poverty is very high in America. The solution proposed by many is simple; give them more money. Make the companies they work for pay them enough to truly provide for themselves and their families. This is a humanitarian solution, a kind of Robin Hood-esque approach of take from the rich(the big companies that hire minimum wage workers) and give to the poor. This is an easy side to take, because it appeals to the moral values shared by many of the people involved in this controversy. People on this side of the argument find themselves asking: 'how can anyone not want this solution?'".

Find content that is applicable to what I am saying. Maybe include a clip of Bernie Sanders talk about the "living wage". Maybe include a picture of Robin Hood as well.

Production Report 11a

In this post, I will be talking about a bit of rough content I have generated from my content outline.

Opening Section:

Introduce myself and the issue. While introducing myself, relate to the audience.

The content I have produced from this is a rough transcript that will be adapted into video essay format. 

Opening Section Raw Content:

"Hello everyone, my name is Malik and I will be talking about the minimum wage controversy. This controversy has been in mainstream media as of late, highlighted by the presidential race that is happening here in America. The basis of the controversy is the democratic nominees are promising and urging raising the minimum wage both federally and in the states. This call has lead to several states announcing to raise the minimum wage through a myriad of ways. The response to these announcements is the elation of the lower to middle class people, and the wariness of economists."

While I talk, have pictures of what I am talking about appear on screen, news headlines, etc... Make sure there is a picture of both democratic nominees and many of the protests that have been happening and the celebrations that have been happening. Also, when referring to states announcing to raise the minimum wage, show pictures of those states (California, Seattle, New York, etc...)

Sunday, April 3, 2016

Peer Review 10b

In this post, I will be reviewing Fernando Coronado's Production Schedule.

I think that your production schedule is well made and that if you follow it then you will get all of your work done on time. I especially like that you left all of Sunday open for extra time.  I would recommend taking advantage of the tech support provided on campus for any technical issues you run into. I would also recommend doing a majority of your work in the study room if possible. I would do this because in my personal experience I am more focused in a study room than I am at home.

Peer Review 10a

In this post, I will be reviewing Nick Hernandez's Rhetorical Analysis.

This rhetorical analysis is very thorough and well done. I would say that your understanding of project 3 is good. I think that if you move forward with this in mind for the rest of your project you will have a successful video essay. The level of detail shown in this rhetorical analysis is impressive.

Reflection on Pre-Production

In this post, I will be reflecting on pre-production, answering these questions:


  1. What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
  2. What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
  3. How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
  4. How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

1. One success was beginning the work in class. This got me started and prepared me to complete the rest of the work.

2. One challenge was how tedious gathering the information on all of the sources was.

3. I think it will be a lot of work but it should be successful.

4. I am cautiously optimistic about this project.

Production Schedule

In this post, I will be showing you my production schedule.

Content Outline

In this post, I will be providing a content outline.

Opening Section:

Introduce myself and the issue. While introducing myself, relate to the audience.

Main Body 1:

State my personal view on the controversy. tell the audience I will be analyzing the pros and the cons, but tell them I am more on the "this idea is bad" side. Tell the audience why I am. Explain to them why some people are on the other side.

Main Body 2:

Begin with the pros of the idea. It is a good concept that is widely supported. It has the backing of many well-known political figures. It greatly appeals to a large majority of the population. Really
show the audience that I understand the solution and that I can understand why it is a good idea.

Main Body 3:

Now show the audience why it isn't a good idea. Cite historical facts. Explain to them why the idea is economically unsupported. This is where I will give a background in a few economic concepts. Take each of the ideas I talked about in the second body and tell them the negative way these things can effect.

Closing:

Sum up my counter argument. Tell the audience a little bit about what I think should be the solution.

Rhetorical Analysis of Project 3

In this post, I will be answering a number of questions.

Author

1. For this project, I will be drawing from my own general interest, my major, current-day political issues, and news stories that I follow. I am interested in the controversy I picked and had already done research of my own before this project was assigned. It is related to my major, being economic in nature. It is a political and social controversy currently and is naturally in the news for this reason.

2. One bias I need to watch out for is the fact that I am liberal. I have mostly liberal views on most present-day issues. This could skew my view on some of the research I am exposing myself to.

Audience

1. I would like my audience to be students with no background in economics and on open mind concerning the raised minimum wage.

2. I would like them to be liberal and take the side of raising the minimum wage.

3. They will probably agree on some points and disagree on others.

4. I will relate to them by showing them that I have a similar background to them.

5. I would say to them what I will be saying in my video essay. All they would need to do is listen and I am sure they will be swayed to my point of view.

Purpose/Message

1. I want my audience to see my perspective and have no choice but to agree with it.

2. I need to fully develop my argument in my own head, and find a way to explain it thoroughly yet concisely.

Context

Genre:

1. I will be doing a video essay.

2. It should be easy to watch and flow well.

3. I have no experience.

4. I am very nervous about this genre, I am not comfortable with it at all.

5. I think that the most effective conventions are the use of pictures and voice.

When:

1. This controversy is grounded in politics, so a background on some political ideas may be necessary.

2. Most major news sources are talking about this, as it is a fairly big deal nationally.
LA Times
Huffington Post
NY Times
Washington Post

3. I will be taking the issue from both sides of the argument, so I won't have any specific counter-arguments to respond to.

Research Report

In this post, I will be providing information on ten of the sources I used.

1. Wall Street Journal, "The Evidence is Piling Up That Higher Minimum Wage Kills Jobs" by David Neumark. Neumark is a professor of Economics, and the director of the Center for Economics and Public Policy. This was written for the audience of the Wall Street Journal, which is mostly made up of middle aged, middle to upper-class men. This would also appeal to a more conservative, republican audience as the subtitle is an appeal against Obama. This is making the argument that raising the minimum wage may not actually help the people, which is made evident by the title. The Wall Street is generally well respected as a media source. The author is also an accomplished economist.


2. Townhall.com, "Why Raising the Minimum Wage is a Bad Idea" by John C. Goodman. Goodman is President of the Goodman Institute and Senior Fellow at The Independent Institute. The audience is mostly middle-aged, middle-class men. Again, this is a more conservative audience as it is an appeal against democratic front-runner Hillary Clinton. This is making the argument that raising the minimum wage may not actually help the people, which is made evident by the title. The author of this is a very well respected economist and writer.


3. USA Today, "California reaches deal on $15 minimum wage" by Paul Davidson. Davidson is a business economics reporter for USA Today. He has been a reporter for 18 years. This is not an opinion piece, just a statement of events. It is targeted at the audience of the USA Today, which is mostly middle-aged, middle-class men. The purpose of this article is to inform the audience of the events in California regarding the plan to raise the minimum wage. USA today is a widely known and trusted news source and the author has a lot of experience in this field.


4. The Washington Post, "The Risks of California's Minimum Wage Increase" by Charles Lane. Lane is a post editorial opinion writer who focuses on economic policy. He was a finalist in 2009 for the Pulitzer Prize for Editorial Writing. The audience would be the readers of the Washington post, who are mostly middle-class adults. The article is telling the audience about the risks of raising the minimum wage. It is also arguing against the use of "evidence-based policymaking". The Washington  Post is a reliable, well-trusted source, and the author is seemingly trustworthy based off of his achievements.


5. The New York Times, "The Minimum Wage: How Much Is Too Much?" by Alan B. Krueger. Alan B. Krueger is a professor of economics and public affairs at Princeton University and former chairman of President Obama’s Council of Economic Advisers. The audience would be the readers of the New York Times, who are mostly upper-class males. This article is arguing that the raise in the minimum wage may be a dangerous thing to do. The New York Times is a well-known and reliable source,and the author is also reliable based off of his background.


6. The Huffington Post, "Minimum Wage Going Up In 14 States At Start Of 2016" by Dave Jamieson. The Huffington post is a more liberal sided online newspaper, so the audience will probably be young and liberal. This source is just telling the reader which states raised their minimum wage and why. The Huffington Post is well-known, so pretty reliable. The author seems experienced.


7. Journalist Resource, "Effects of raising the minimum wage: Research and key lessons" by John Wihbey. This is an informational article, so its purpose is to inform he reader of the effects of raising the minimum wage. The author seems credible, but I have never heard of the website, so that may cast the credibility of the article into question.

8. Buzzfeed, "California Poised To Raise Minimum Wage To $15" By Cora Lewis. This source is targeted at the audience of BuzzFeed, which is an incredibly broad audience. This is another informative piece aimed to inform the readers of the planned raise of the minimum wage. BuzzFeed is generally reliable, but little information can be found on the author, which limits its credibility.

9. The Economist, "Employment down, productivity up?" by "Buttonwood". This is targeted at economically minded consumers, which is the audience of the Economist. This source is showing the audience one potential consequence of the raising of the minimum wage. The Economist is a reliable source, but the ambiguity surrounding the author calls the credibility of the article into question.

10. LA Times, "Who wins with a $15 minimum wage?" by Natalie Kitroeff. I could not find a lot of information on the author other than social media accounts. The audience is mostly middle-aged adults who are middle-class. This article is answering the question posed in its title, explaining to the audience who would win with this minimum wage increase. The LA Times is a reliable source, but the ambiguity surrounding the author negatively impacts its credibility.