In this post, I will reviewing my peers work.
12A:
Comment on Jason Boley's Rough Cut
12B:
Comment on Missy Webb's Rough Cut
Sunday, April 17, 2016
Open Post to Peer Reviewers
In this post I will be providing you with my rough draft and discussing it.
When considering my rough draft, I would like you to know that it is the transcript for a video essay. Everything on it will be read out loud and I may add a bit to it as i read. It will be accompanied by images and videos.
A big weakness of this is the fact that I can not present the reader the video version of this because I wont have the materials until next week.
A strength of my work is I think I have a well developed argument and I will be able to quickly transform this into video format based on the transcript I have already prepared.
When considering my rough draft, I would like you to know that it is the transcript for a video essay. Everything on it will be read out loud and I may add a bit to it as i read. It will be accompanied by images and videos.
A big weakness of this is the fact that I can not present the reader the video version of this because I wont have the materials until next week.
A strength of my work is I think I have a well developed argument and I will be able to quickly transform this into video format based on the transcript I have already prepared.
Editorial Report 12b
In this post, I will be revising content from my rough cut.
Main Body 3 (Rough Cut):
“Unfortunately, there are negatives to a plan like this. America has never attempted to increase the minimum wage by such a large amount, (as the fifteen dollar wage would be doubling the federal minimum). Looking at this from an economic standpoint, the plan is unsound. The biggest issue is that businesses that hire minimum wage workers will be forced to do something. 3 million people having their wages increased by an average of 4 dollars is a steep price for these companies to pay. Another important thing to understand about that 3 million number is that it only counts people who are being paid minimum wage. If an individual is being paid nine dollars an hour, technically they are being paid more than minimum wage. However, when the minimum wage increases, they will be brought up with it. This means that the 3 million number is not entirely accurate. When considering this, we must now know that companies will be raising the wages of anyone in America making less than $15 an hour. When considering this, 42% of Americans will be getting a wage increase."
Main Body 3 (Revised Version):
“Unfortunately, there are negatives to a plan like this. America has never attempted to increase the minimum wage by such a large amount, (as the fifteen dollar wage would be doubling the federal minimum). Looking at this from an economic standpoint, the plan is unsound. The biggest issue is that businesses that hire minimum wage workers will be forced to do something. 3 million people having their wages increased by an average of 4 dollars is a steep price for these companies to pay. Another important thing to understand about that 3 million number is that it only counts people who are being paid minimum wage. If an individual is being paid nine dollars an hour, technically they are being paid more than minimum wage. However, when the minimum wage increases, they will be brought up with it. This means that the 3 million number is not entirely accurate. When considering this, we must now know that companies will be raising the wages of anyone in America making less than $15 an hour. When considering this, 42% of Americans will be getting a wage increase. (http://fortune.com/2015/04/13/who-makes-15-per-hour/).This can massively affect American companies that higher low wage workers, and not for the better. The current American workforce as of March 2016 is 160 million. 42% of that is almost 70 million people. Assuming the average increase is two dollars, that is 140 million dollars that companies now have to pay. And this is not just companies like McDonalds and Burger King. This is also a large majority of privately owned restaurants and retailers."
Main Body 3 (Rough Cut):
“Unfortunately, there are negatives to a plan like this. America has never attempted to increase the minimum wage by such a large amount, (as the fifteen dollar wage would be doubling the federal minimum). Looking at this from an economic standpoint, the plan is unsound. The biggest issue is that businesses that hire minimum wage workers will be forced to do something. 3 million people having their wages increased by an average of 4 dollars is a steep price for these companies to pay. Another important thing to understand about that 3 million number is that it only counts people who are being paid minimum wage. If an individual is being paid nine dollars an hour, technically they are being paid more than minimum wage. However, when the minimum wage increases, they will be brought up with it. This means that the 3 million number is not entirely accurate. When considering this, we must now know that companies will be raising the wages of anyone in America making less than $15 an hour. When considering this, 42% of Americans will be getting a wage increase."
Main Body 3 (Revised Version):
“Unfortunately, there are negatives to a plan like this. America has never attempted to increase the minimum wage by such a large amount, (as the fifteen dollar wage would be doubling the federal minimum). Looking at this from an economic standpoint, the plan is unsound. The biggest issue is that businesses that hire minimum wage workers will be forced to do something. 3 million people having their wages increased by an average of 4 dollars is a steep price for these companies to pay. Another important thing to understand about that 3 million number is that it only counts people who are being paid minimum wage. If an individual is being paid nine dollars an hour, technically they are being paid more than minimum wage. However, when the minimum wage increases, they will be brought up with it. This means that the 3 million number is not entirely accurate. When considering this, we must now know that companies will be raising the wages of anyone in America making less than $15 an hour. When considering this, 42% of Americans will be getting a wage increase. (http://fortune.com/2015/04/13/who-makes-15-per-hour/).This can massively affect American companies that higher low wage workers, and not for the better. The current American workforce as of March 2016 is 160 million. 42% of that is almost 70 million people. Assuming the average increase is two dollars, that is 140 million dollars that companies now have to pay. And this is not just companies like McDonalds and Burger King. This is also a large majority of privately owned restaurants and retailers."
Editorial Report 12a
In this post, I will be revising content from my rough cut.
Main Body 2 (Rough Cut):
“The pros of a plan like this are fairly obvious. The
concept behind the plan (giving money to the people who apparently most need
it) is one that is easy to back from a humanitarian standpoint. This plan also
has the support of big political figures in America (Barack Obama, Hillary
Clinton, and Bernie Sanders most notably). This makes the plan easier to
support because many peoples role models have placed there trust in it. This
plan also caters to a majority of the population. More than 3 million people in
America are being paid minimum wage, which is about 4 percent of the working
population. The low wage leads to many of these workers to be at the poverty
line or below it. The family and friends of these people are effected by an
increase of the minimum wage, so it appeals to all of those people.”
Main Body 2 (Revised Version):
“The pros of a plan like this are fairly obvious. The
concept behind the plan (giving money to the people who apparently most need
it) is one that is easy to back from a humanitarian standpoint. This plan also
has the support of big political figures in America (Barack Obama, Hillary
Clinton, and Bernie Sanders most notably). This makes the plan easier to
support because many peoples role models have placed there trust in it. This
plan also caters to a majority of the population. More than 3 million people in
America are being paid minimum wage. The low wage leads to many of these workers to be at the poverty
line or below it. The family and friends of these people are effected by an
increase of the minimum wage, so it appeals to all of those people. All in all, the wage increase should positively impact the lives of the American poor, and help control the massive poverty problem we are dealing with in this country”
As I speak, include pictures of the political people who support this plan, maybe including articles that are titled with something that proves they do support it. Include a graph of the people working minimum wage. Maybe create a visual that shows how many people 3 million is. Illustrate the poverty line.
Friday, April 8, 2016
Reflection on Production
In this post, I will be answering the following questions:
- What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
- What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
- How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
- How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?
1. One thing that worked this week was putting together my raw content.
2. A challenge was that I chose to share a transcript of my work, and did not convert it into a video essay.
3. I think that next week will be fairly easy, as I have already established a base for my project.
4. I am cautiously optimistic again for this project, though it will be difficult to make the video part of the video essay.
Production Report 11b
In this post I will be talking about a bit of rough content I have generated from my content outline.
Main Body 1:
State my personal view on the controversy. tell the audience I will be analyzing the pros and the cons, but tell them I am more on the "this idea is bad" side. Tell the audience why I am. Explain to them why some people are on the other side.
Main Body 1:
State my personal view on the controversy. tell the audience I will be analyzing the pros and the cons, but tell them I am more on the "this idea is bad" side. Tell the audience why I am. Explain to them why some people are on the other side.
The content I have produced from this is a rough transcript that will be adapted into video essay format.
Main Body 1 Raw Content:
"I have my own opinion on this topic. I tend to side a bit more with the economists who are wary of this minimum wage increase. First, I think we should identify the problem. The problem, at its base, is that lower-class workers are not provided with a "living wage" and that poverty is very high in America. The solution proposed by many is simple; give them more money. Make the companies they work for pay them enough to truly provide for themselves and their families. This is a humanitarian solution, a kind of Robin Hood-esque approach of take from the rich(the big companies that hire minimum wage workers) and give to the poor. This is an easy side to take, because it appeals to the moral values shared by many of the people involved in this controversy. People on this side of the argument find themselves asking: 'how can anyone not want this solution?'".
Find content that is applicable to what I am saying. Maybe include a clip of Bernie Sanders talk about the "living wage". Maybe include a picture of Robin Hood as well.
Production Report 11a
In this post, I will be talking about a bit of rough content I have generated from my content outline.
Opening Section:
Introduce myself and the issue. While introducing myself, relate to the audience.
Opening Section:
Introduce myself and the issue. While introducing myself, relate to the audience.
The content I have produced from this is a rough transcript that will be adapted into video essay format.
Opening Section Raw Content:
"Hello everyone, my name is Malik and I will be talking about the minimum wage controversy. This controversy has been in mainstream media as of late, highlighted by the presidential race that is happening here in America. The basis of the controversy is the democratic nominees are promising and urging raising the minimum wage both federally and in the states. This call has lead to several states announcing to raise the minimum wage through a myriad of ways. The response to these announcements is the elation of the lower to middle class people, and the wariness of economists."
While I talk, have pictures of what I am talking about appear on screen, news headlines, etc... Make sure there is a picture of both democratic nominees and many of the protests that have been happening and the celebrations that have been happening. Also, when referring to states announcing to raise the minimum wage, show pictures of those states (California, Seattle, New York, etc...)
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