Peer Review

In this post, I will be reviewing the work of my peers.

Joshua Smith's Review

Rigo Avila's Review

Open Post to Peer Reviewers

In this post, I will be showing you my draft.

I would like my peer reviewers to keep in mind that this is a draft and that I will be editing it further, I would prefer editing comments be made on the content of what I say and not about anything I should edit to make it flow more smoothly because I plan to do that already.

One weakness in my draft is that it is pretty long, I think that what I said is important so I am not sure how to make it shorter.

One strength of my draft is that it goes into good detail about how I felt about this course and reflects on how I have grown from it.

Peer Review

In this post, I will be reviewing my peers' work.

Peer Review 13a

Peer Review 13b

Reflection on Project 3

In this post, I will be answering the following questions:

1. What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
2. What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
3. How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
4. How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

1. One success I experienced was developing my argument. My drafts were well written so I knew exactly what I wanted to say.

2. One challenge I experienced was finding visual content for my video essay.

3. Now that this project is over, a huge weight is off of my shoulders. I am ready for my final project.

4. I think that I developed a good argument and that my project was a success.

Revised Post to Peer Reviewers

In this post, I will be answering these questions about my fine cut:

• Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know
• Major issues or weaknesses in the “Fine Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses)
• Major virtues or strengths in the “Fine Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)

1. What I would like you to keep in mind as you review my draft is that this is the first time I have ever created any media like this. I hope that it has the correct conventions and that my argument is clearly defined.

2. I would say that an issue I had was the lack of outside audio in my piece, and I did this simply because I did not know how to get audio for it from the internet. I should have spent more time researching how to do this.

3. I think the strength lies in my argument, and that anyone who watches my video essay will be convinced that I am right.

Editorial Report 13b

In this post, I will be comparing content from my rough draft to my final draft.

Rough Draft Conclusion:

When considering this plan, I see its merit. I see how anyone could look at it and think: “why not, it’s helping the people that need help the most”. However, on closer inspection, it may be a bit more dangerous than we may think. It could seriously destabilize the American economy by forcing companies to increase outsourcing, have fewer jobs for people, and turn to automated solutions. This could actually end up working against the people it is trying to help, because 8 dollars an hour may turn to zero, and the workers watching as computers or people from other countries do their jobs. This may also run companies out of business if they cant keep up with the increases. People looking to start new businesses will have an even tougher time doing so, and will look to other more business-accommodating economies for their business. Is a minimum wage increase a bad idea? Not necessarily. Is a minimum wage increase to 15$ a bad idea? Absolutely. I believe that something should be done about the poverty crisis in America, I just think that the solution should be more measured and decisive.”

Final Draft Conclusion:

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The changes made here are obvious, I made the content into a video essay form. This is more effective because it is my voice and my inflection that drives home key points in the conclusion.

Editorial Report 13a

In this post, I will be comparing content from my rough draft to content from my final draft.

Rough Cut Intro:

"Hello everyone, my name is Malik and I will be talking about the minimum wage controversy. This controversy has been in mainstream media as of late, highlighted by the presidential race that is happening here in America. The basis of the controversy is the democratic nominees are promising and urging raising the minimum wage both federally and in the states. This call has lead to several states announcing to raise the minimum wage through a myriad of ways. The response to these announcements is the elation of the lower to middle class people, and the wariness of economists."

While I talk, have pictures of what I am talking about appear on screen, news headlines, etc... Make sure there is a picture of both democratic nominees and many of the protests that have been happening and the celebrations that have been happening. Also, when referring to states announcing to raise the minimum wage, show pictures of those states (California, Seattle, New York, etc...)

Final Cut Intro:

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The changes made here are obvious, I made the content into a video essay form. This is more effective because it is my voice and my inflection that drives home key points in the introduction.